TheOriginalSE
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Every cycle I will give my feedback on the RPs that were posted. These will usually be 1-2 sentences on anything that particularly struck me .. whether it was something I liked, something that I felt just didn't click. It is meant to give you a little insight into my judging.
You can feel free to post your own feedback in this thread as well, but please be constructive.
Please note that I do not read any RPs until after the deadline is over and I read them all at the same time so I have a general idea of what might be given a 70, or a 65, or a 62 .. so on and so forth. I will not post the scores themselves, but each week I will announce what was the Roleplay of the Week.
CYBERSTRIKE 09
1. Yossi Hayat: I enjoyed the expanded explanation of Hayat's autism. It helped flesh the character out. A shame that your opponent didn't RP.
2. Mr. Entertainment: RP#1 - Turning the DQ loss to Chaos into a "successful title defense" for Entertainment is exactly what one would expect from E. It was a good RP that kept Entertainment at the forefront - where the New ERA Champion needs to be.
3. Mr. Entertainment: RP#2 - The opening had me LOL. And you went through and picked apart your opponents with precision.
4. The First / Cruise: RP#1 - I liked how Cruise immediately went after Entertainment's attempt to try to turn the loss to Chaos into a win for the Champ. First's part was extremely strong. Taking on Entertainment as an instrument of New ERA and it's silly little rules.
5. The First / Cruise: RP#2 - Reality intervention. Loved it. This was a good example of how to respect your opponents without completely shitting on them. First knew that the match would "make him a better wrestler." Respecting your opponents but still managing to tear them - fantastic.
6. Richard Dweck: Another no-show opponent.. would have love to have seen you two work off each other, but alas .. the RP itself was interesting. Short, but it got the job done.
7. Chaos: The theme woven throughout the RP was great. Larry Tact .. the thief. The one who couldn't stand to let his younger brother get the spotlight. I was saddened to see Scott leave as Chaos was hitting his stride and he had continually been improving to the point where I could easily see the Championship around Chaos' waist.
8. Michael Montgomery: Half-Ass Shawn Hart. LOL. If Montgomery had consistently put up RPs similar to this one, his record would have been much better.
9. Larry Tact: I loved how Tact made the claim that no matter what he's doing, New ERA is still his turf. He is, after all, the first ever New ERA Champion. I would have loved to have seen a Tact / Chaos bloodfeud .. if only that fatal fourway went as planned .. who knows what could have happened.
10. Pro Wrestling's SJH: Hart don't take shit from no one! Hart's always a favorite to read and this was no different.
11. Jonathan Marx: Marx making a promise about breaking his own record the next time he gets the New ERA Championship! You best hold up that promise! It was a good RP and helped to fan the flames between the four men.
RP of the Week: "The Giver" by Larry Tact
CYBERSTRIKE 10
1. Yossi Hayat: I wasn't a fan of the opening paragraph .. but I enjoyed the rest. Hayat thinking that the Championship will cure his problems came across well.
2. Richard Dweck: It was entertaining and I was able to get into it quickly.
3. Larry Tact: You can really tell that Jeff was into this match and the setup for PrimeTime. This is why I love when handlers work together on angles. It improves not only the quality of the season, but the RPs throughout the season. This is a prime example. The RP laid the foundation perfectly.
4. Fanatic: Another great RP. Fanatic's turn to shine and shine he did. I liked the Tact appearance at the end and how he implied that if Suicide and Hart couldn't respect each other they'd go down in flames.
5. Mr. Entertainment: RP#1 - Firstly, I like that you incorporated other goings on in your RP. Making mention of Dweck shows that Entertainment keeps his thumb on the pulse of the league he supposedly is molding into his image. Entertainment and Cruise always are able to play off each other and this was a great battle.
6. Mr. Entertainment: RP#2 - Radio interview! Like. Entertainment was able to focus on Cruise while also keeping a keen eye on his opponent at the premier event. Overall it was an entertaining (shock) read.
7. Cameron Cruise: RP#1 - Cruise talking about he was going to complete the trifecta (since no one else has) was a great point that I never thought of. Also the RP brought more light on the First/CC interactions. Good job.
8. Cameron Cruise: RP#2 - You talked shit about Entertainment losing to Chaos by DQ ... then make the same exact argument E did in regards to your count out loss against Chaos... that seemed off. Overall though, another good effort.
Although
The
New Sentence
On
A
New Line
Thing
Got
Somewhat
Annoying
To Read.
9. Suicide: I liked how Suicide stepped out and turned Tact's words against him. Suicide is a name that instills nervousness in the stars of New ERA. I also liked how Suicide brought up how Tact must think that his mere presence in New ERA is a threat to the Tact Legacy. A great Season for Suicide ... so happy to have him back.
10. Michael Montgomery: I liked the way you described your losses in New ERA. The proverbial banana peel defense, LOL. The RP was short, but your opponent never showed up. That bitch.
RP of the Week: "Radio Gaga? Or Radio Blah Blah? It's Radio ENTERTAINMENT!" by Mr. Entertainment
(I told you I'd get these up before Season 3 started! Hmph. Now for PrimeTime feedback.
)
You can feel free to post your own feedback in this thread as well, but please be constructive.
Please note that I do not read any RPs until after the deadline is over and I read them all at the same time so I have a general idea of what might be given a 70, or a 65, or a 62 .. so on and so forth. I will not post the scores themselves, but each week I will announce what was the Roleplay of the Week.
CYBERSTRIKE 09
1. Yossi Hayat: I enjoyed the expanded explanation of Hayat's autism. It helped flesh the character out. A shame that your opponent didn't RP.
2. Mr. Entertainment: RP#1 - Turning the DQ loss to Chaos into a "successful title defense" for Entertainment is exactly what one would expect from E. It was a good RP that kept Entertainment at the forefront - where the New ERA Champion needs to be.
3. Mr. Entertainment: RP#2 - The opening had me LOL. And you went through and picked apart your opponents with precision.
4. The First / Cruise: RP#1 - I liked how Cruise immediately went after Entertainment's attempt to try to turn the loss to Chaos into a win for the Champ. First's part was extremely strong. Taking on Entertainment as an instrument of New ERA and it's silly little rules.
5. The First / Cruise: RP#2 - Reality intervention. Loved it. This was a good example of how to respect your opponents without completely shitting on them. First knew that the match would "make him a better wrestler." Respecting your opponents but still managing to tear them - fantastic.
6. Richard Dweck: Another no-show opponent.. would have love to have seen you two work off each other, but alas .. the RP itself was interesting. Short, but it got the job done.
7. Chaos: The theme woven throughout the RP was great. Larry Tact .. the thief. The one who couldn't stand to let his younger brother get the spotlight. I was saddened to see Scott leave as Chaos was hitting his stride and he had continually been improving to the point where I could easily see the Championship around Chaos' waist.
8. Michael Montgomery: Half-Ass Shawn Hart. LOL. If Montgomery had consistently put up RPs similar to this one, his record would have been much better.
9. Larry Tact: I loved how Tact made the claim that no matter what he's doing, New ERA is still his turf. He is, after all, the first ever New ERA Champion. I would have loved to have seen a Tact / Chaos bloodfeud .. if only that fatal fourway went as planned .. who knows what could have happened.
10. Pro Wrestling's SJH: Hart don't take shit from no one! Hart's always a favorite to read and this was no different.
11. Jonathan Marx: Marx making a promise about breaking his own record the next time he gets the New ERA Championship! You best hold up that promise! It was a good RP and helped to fan the flames between the four men.
RP of the Week: "The Giver" by Larry Tact
CYBERSTRIKE 10
1. Yossi Hayat: I wasn't a fan of the opening paragraph .. but I enjoyed the rest. Hayat thinking that the Championship will cure his problems came across well.
2. Richard Dweck: It was entertaining and I was able to get into it quickly.
3. Larry Tact: You can really tell that Jeff was into this match and the setup for PrimeTime. This is why I love when handlers work together on angles. It improves not only the quality of the season, but the RPs throughout the season. This is a prime example. The RP laid the foundation perfectly.
4. Fanatic: Another great RP. Fanatic's turn to shine and shine he did. I liked the Tact appearance at the end and how he implied that if Suicide and Hart couldn't respect each other they'd go down in flames.
5. Mr. Entertainment: RP#1 - Firstly, I like that you incorporated other goings on in your RP. Making mention of Dweck shows that Entertainment keeps his thumb on the pulse of the league he supposedly is molding into his image. Entertainment and Cruise always are able to play off each other and this was a great battle.
6. Mr. Entertainment: RP#2 - Radio interview! Like. Entertainment was able to focus on Cruise while also keeping a keen eye on his opponent at the premier event. Overall it was an entertaining (shock) read.
7. Cameron Cruise: RP#1 - Cruise talking about he was going to complete the trifecta (since no one else has) was a great point that I never thought of. Also the RP brought more light on the First/CC interactions. Good job.
8. Cameron Cruise: RP#2 - You talked shit about Entertainment losing to Chaos by DQ ... then make the same exact argument E did in regards to your count out loss against Chaos... that seemed off. Overall though, another good effort.
Although
The
New Sentence
On
A
New Line
Thing
Got
Somewhat
Annoying
To Read.
9. Suicide: I liked how Suicide stepped out and turned Tact's words against him. Suicide is a name that instills nervousness in the stars of New ERA. I also liked how Suicide brought up how Tact must think that his mere presence in New ERA is a threat to the Tact Legacy. A great Season for Suicide ... so happy to have him back.
10. Michael Montgomery: I liked the way you described your losses in New ERA. The proverbial banana peel defense, LOL. The RP was short, but your opponent never showed up. That bitch.
RP of the Week: "Radio Gaga? Or Radio Blah Blah? It's Radio ENTERTAINMENT!" by Mr. Entertainment
(I told you I'd get these up before Season 3 started! Hmph. Now for PrimeTime feedback.
)