TAI PEI DEATHMATCH - FDJ v NICKY COROZZO
Chaotic clusterfucks are Evan's own personal hog heaven, which made this a super fun read to start the show (IMO). Just brutal stuff here, and the staple gun to the fucking tongue, jayzuss.
THE RUNDOWN
Me.
SAM HORRY v JAKE DONOVAN
Solid effort, the switching between present and past was a little odd in a nitpicky sort of way. Just keep in mind that we want everything in present tense for future reference. Still, this was a solid fight with an ending that keeps the book open for another arc, so I look forward to what you guys do for a follow up, which is what's most important. Now neither of you have to bother with trying introduce your characters to each other, you can get right into it at full speed.
MUTUAL RESPECT
I like these segments, it's putting two people together who aren't directly involved with in anything inside of the ring. I want to see more of these from everyone, if necessary, you don't have to pre-plan them along with your actual booking and submit requests for segments on the fly... ANYWAY, as far as this segment, yeah I don't want to see too much harping about "we're women and we're gonna show the men..." It's tired and not necessary after the first couplafew times it's brought up. The rest of the segment though was a nice little interlude that said what it needed to said and continues to build a connection between these two.
ANDY SHARP v FELTON BIGSBY
One nitpicky thing right from the jump, Andy Sharp should have made his entrance after Bigsby's, but that's not a big deal. Reading this and thinking, Andy vs Jake could be a nifty good vs evil flippydoofest. I really like the pacing of this match, back and forth with the right amount of control for each guy, like where Sharp gets the long run of spotlight on offense to show himself off before giving the heat back to Bigsby. Good stuff all around from Sethrow here, I've said it a billion times already, so good to have ya back, bud!
DID YOU HEAR SOMETHING
Filler with a purpose!
SIDETRACK COMMENTS ABOUT PPV MATCH WRITING THINGIES:Okay I just want to point something out for future reference, also the fact that I will be highlighting this in one of the many resource docs that I am working on. For PPV entrances, I want the inclusion of a "music line" (with html coding for example purposes)...
<center><i># "Mach 13 Elephant Explosion" by Masafumi Takada #</i></center>
Basically, instead of using lyrics, use the above line (with the musical characters instead of the hashtags) for your PPV ring entrances right where you envision the music starting to play as your character enters the arena. It's just a small detail that I would like for everyone to use going forward (more of this uniformity that I want). You might have noticed I went into some of your matches and added this line, if not, go back and look or look at my Dusty Griffith entrance, or how Lindz wrote for Troy, Dames did for Euge. For the record, I'm not at all trying to micromanage how you write your PPV entrance, do what you will, just remember this tiny detail.
Oh and also, I'm going to be developing a uniform way for how Quimbey does the introductions, but only in the order that he says things. For instance, the way Rob did it here for Mushi is spot on.
Darren “DQ” Quimbey:
Introducing first, accompanied to the ring by Eddie Dante, he hails from Mito, Ibaraki Prefecture, Japan, and weighs in at three-hundred seventeen pounds, he is “THE GOD-BEAST!” MU! SHI! GI! HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA-RAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!
Hails from LOCATION, weighs in at SPELLED OUT WEIGHT, he is YOUR WRESTLERS NAME HERE!
Anyway, these two items and a couplafew other things will be addressed in one of the upcoming DEFINFO docs that I am working on, including the use of buffer / transitionary material at the front and back end of your matches, and deciding how we as a group do pinfall counts (because it's kind of all over the map right now).
BACK TO THE SHOW!
MUSHIGIHARA vs HARMONY
DAAAG Mushi not fucking around to start here... I don't know why you insist on saying you suck at match writing, Tracey, this is good work. Match writing is all about common sense and understanding good pacing for the match you want to write based on the characters involved... DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUDE, DAT SPOT WHERE MUSHI UNMASKS AS A CALL BACK TO THE FIRST MATCH, YAAAASSSSS!... The post was also really well done with the commentators freaking out Mushi was gonna attack again, then he doesn't and their surprise when he bows in respect, good good stuff.
* Mushi's bow and Dusty's handshake later in the show has me thinking of stuff RAWB!
JUST LOOK UP AND SLIGHTLY TO THE LEFT
Wait a minute, Seth can babyface too? WAT?! Love every note played in this from the beginning bit of having something to prove, the bit about wagging a judgemental finger at torrenters, the lining Sharp up for the SOHER scene, good stuff, BUT WAIT THERES MOAR?! Nifty setup with Old Man Keeling's appearance given what we know happens later on.
CURTIS PENN & JONNY BOOYA v CANCER JILES & TYRONE WALKER
YAAAAAAAY Dan with the big pinch hitting effort to help a fellow handler out in a tough spot, BOOOOOOOOOO George for going and pulling a Houdini on us again with Jiles, oh well... One noticeable error here, the announcers are no longer at ringside, Keebs and Angus are in a booth/stage WCW Nitro style, but it's forgiveable considering you haven't been in DEF for a good while, live and learn and whatnot... That aside, this was a fun little tag match that closes this chapter nicely, both sides got some shine and it helps setup what's to come going forward. So again, big ups to you Dan for stepping in and helping out, all of the brownie points are yours.
CRASH LANDING aka YAY, BEN IS BACK! 8)
HENRY KEY-EZ REEEEEETURRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRNS! Seriously, I got nothing else to say about this, I just want MOAR BCUZ MOAR HANRAY KEY-EZ!
DAN RYAN v FRANK HOLIDAY
Look, I'm not gonna lie, I wish Ken hadn't flaked on us, because I would have loved, ABSOLUTELY LOVED, to have seen what the minds of Brunk AND Ken could have come up with together for this. I don't even mean this match, I mean for the whole arc that would have lead into this match, so much in the way of missed opportunity here... ANYWAY, as for this match, once again, I find myself wondering why Brunk hates writing matches, because this is good. It's got a more old school pace and feel, rather than the usual balls to the wall style I usually go for when writing (haha), which is a nice switcharoo to be honest, especially in contrast to the match I wrote which followed this. And that Rocky IV reference is so friggin win, dude, hahaha. I wish I didn't know everything that's going on, because ZOMG the speculation. I definitely hope there is follow up in the form of blow back on the next DEFtv to cover what went down in this match, not repercussions, but more like reaction to what happened.
PAIN IS COMING TO DEFIANCE
You guys have no idea right now, I'm seeing so much potential here with this guy because of pure dimensions that this character fills that DEFIANCE hasn't had as a main character since I've been around (ex: Nicky Corozzo is a backup player, Big Vinny was too, FDJ is all over the place). Super duper monster sized heel character, and I'm not even thinking about how the actual character itself plays yet, based on what Ed and I discussed, he's basically an enormous schizophrenic which can twist and turn this character in a number of ways. ALSO, I wanna give Ed some big ups for stepping in to take a spot on the show when I was full on derping to fill this spot on the show with something.
DUSTY GRIFFITH v BRONSON BOX
Me, for the most part. Thanks for all the kind words, folks, it was fun to write... HAH! Nice work, Seth, I knew I didn't need to pre-check your half of the post match before publishing the show, you're always aces, bud 8)
NO MORE FREEBIES
Big ups to Seth for jumping in to do one more last minute spot filler for the show.
MAIN EVENT / FIST OF DEFIANCE: EUGENE DEWEY (c) v LINDSAY TROY
Every time I read a match with LT in it, I gotta listen to Trampled Under Foot, so much swag... Not sure where I'm at in this match, wherever Euge breaks the count after LT gets tangled in the ring apron, so far so so very good guys. Love the opportunist heel gamesmanship after an extended run with LT in control, picking Euge apart. Dames digging deep into the bag of tricks in this section with Euge having his feet on the ropes, cheap shotting when Ryan isn't looking, good good stuff... I also really dig the constant playing up of Dan Ryan's role in the match as referee, using that stipulation that is hanging over the characters head as well... NITPICKY CRITICISM TIME: I would have liked a little more meat on the selling of the Koji Clutch instead of having it be where Euge almost instantly starts to fade from the hold. It's not a huge deal, it's more of a what I would have done situation, which means it's neither right or wrong, just personal preference. I also think Euge getting to the ropes would have been better to escape the hold, again nitpicky, because this has been phenomenal regardless... Legit, so much intrigue can be drummed up after that DQ finish from multiple directions. Yep yep yep, all of the wins that can be had is what this match is doing, great stuff.
What did we do right?
Everyone got their matches done - more or less - on time. People stepping up to help out in a pinch (Dan, Seth and Ed), all of the appreciation guys.
What did we do wrong?
Minor nitpicky things to be honest, otherwise nothing glaring.
Match of the Night?
Main Event
Segment of the Night?
Henry Keyes > Andy Sharp > Lindz/Harm in that order.
Top Face of the Night?
Andy Sharp
Top Heel of the Night?
Dan Ryan
On the Bubble / Who is about to break out?
People on the bottom figuring it out to be honest,
Favorite Quotes?
Dan Ryan going Ivan Drago, and at the risk of being a douche, I like my Angus theory about Dan Ryan being bannished to the couch if he jobbed Lindsay Troy.
Mark-Out Moments?
Mushi bowing to Harm, the constant playing up the tension in the main event, starting out slow and struggling to write Dusty/Boxer and then it becoming a blast once I got on a roll, HANRAY KEY-EZES RETURN!
How was the overall reading experience?
It was an easy enough read when I could make myself sit and focus on reading through it.