TheOriginalSE
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Every cycle I will give my feedback on the RPs that were posted. These will usually be 1-2 sentences on anything that particularly struck me .. whether it was something I liked, something that I felt just didn't click. It is meant to give you a little insight into my judging.
You can feel free to post your own feedback in this thread as well, but please be constructive.
Please note that I do not read any RPs until after the deadline is over and I read them all at the same time so I have a general idea of what might be given a 70, or a 65, or a 62 .. so on and so forth. I will not post the scores themselves, but each week I will announce what was the Roleplay of the Week.
1. Stacy Jones: I liked this roleplay much more than last week's. It offered a good split between character development and relevancy. The only thing I caught that was a potential downside was that you put "Thursday I'll show them all what I'm made of" (or something to that effect). Cyberstrike technically took place on a Tuesday, even though results were released the morning after. Either way, good job.
2. Michael Montgomery: Your character came off much more clearly this time. I could sense the arrogance. I liked how you tried to turn the DQ into a victory. More time could have been spent on the First, but I did like the RP.
3. Cameron Cruise: Infinitely more cohesive than last week. You managed to touch on other things going on in the promotion without the RP feeling scattered. If there's one suggestion I could make, though - there's still a lot of reference to outside leagues and outside happenings.
4. Mr. Entertainment: Another gem. The Zombie Warrick had me actually laughing out loud. I applaud you for putting up a great RP considering that you had very little to go off of background-wise on Fanatic. This match won the "most-difficult to judge" award this week, heh.
5. The First: I ... loved this RP. Out of all the RPs this week, this one to me seemed the most "real." I could picture it. The connecting images of the cards, what they mean, and how it applied to the match appealed to the lawyer in me, LOL. Great job.
6. Chaos: You guys were another match that was really close .. and I hope I did the character right even with the end result. I could really follow Chaos' line of reasoning. It flowed well. Hopefully you feel better enough to come back next show with more of what you put up this week. Good job.
7. Fanatic: As I said for Mr. E, you guys won the award for "match that I had to sleep on." Part of the reason I put up results in the morning is because sometimes after my first readings of RPs the scores are tied or extremely close. I loved the fact that Tact spent most of the promo talking. The story flowed well and by the end of the promo I was pumped (or if I were an actual fan, I would be pumped) to see what Fanatic would do in the ring.
8. Shawn Hart: Humor and relevancy. I was worried at first that I'd open the thread and find ONLY a poll, but thankfully what was written was well-thought out and Hart-esque.
9. Jonathan Marx: You are great at bringing in contemporary issues with you roleplays. Sorry you didn't have much to work with (again). That's been solved for C03.
RP of the Week: "What the Future Holds" by the First
You can feel free to post your own feedback in this thread as well, but please be constructive.
Please note that I do not read any RPs until after the deadline is over and I read them all at the same time so I have a general idea of what might be given a 70, or a 65, or a 62 .. so on and so forth. I will not post the scores themselves, but each week I will announce what was the Roleplay of the Week.
1. Stacy Jones: I liked this roleplay much more than last week's. It offered a good split between character development and relevancy. The only thing I caught that was a potential downside was that you put "Thursday I'll show them all what I'm made of" (or something to that effect). Cyberstrike technically took place on a Tuesday, even though results were released the morning after. Either way, good job.
2. Michael Montgomery: Your character came off much more clearly this time. I could sense the arrogance. I liked how you tried to turn the DQ into a victory. More time could have been spent on the First, but I did like the RP.
3. Cameron Cruise: Infinitely more cohesive than last week. You managed to touch on other things going on in the promotion without the RP feeling scattered. If there's one suggestion I could make, though - there's still a lot of reference to outside leagues and outside happenings.
4. Mr. Entertainment: Another gem. The Zombie Warrick had me actually laughing out loud. I applaud you for putting up a great RP considering that you had very little to go off of background-wise on Fanatic. This match won the "most-difficult to judge" award this week, heh.
5. The First: I ... loved this RP. Out of all the RPs this week, this one to me seemed the most "real." I could picture it. The connecting images of the cards, what they mean, and how it applied to the match appealed to the lawyer in me, LOL. Great job.
6. Chaos: You guys were another match that was really close .. and I hope I did the character right even with the end result. I could really follow Chaos' line of reasoning. It flowed well. Hopefully you feel better enough to come back next show with more of what you put up this week. Good job.
7. Fanatic: As I said for Mr. E, you guys won the award for "match that I had to sleep on." Part of the reason I put up results in the morning is because sometimes after my first readings of RPs the scores are tied or extremely close. I loved the fact that Tact spent most of the promo talking. The story flowed well and by the end of the promo I was pumped (or if I were an actual fan, I would be pumped) to see what Fanatic would do in the ring.
8. Shawn Hart: Humor and relevancy. I was worried at first that I'd open the thread and find ONLY a poll, but thankfully what was written was well-thought out and Hart-esque.
9. Jonathan Marx: You are great at bringing in contemporary issues with you roleplays. Sorry you didn't have much to work with (again). That's been solved for C03.
RP of the Week: "What the Future Holds" by the First
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