Re: DEFCON Arc Discussion/Feedback thread - DEFtv 85 is LIVE!!
THE COLDEST OF OPENS
Ah, yes … the tried and true Earlier Today gimmick. Trunk/boot. A little for the yanks and little for the .. yank-nots? Dante letting it be known last week were merely shots over the bow. Very well written segment. Stellar show open teasing the main event. Not much to say other than that.
Quick, ran the things.
GOOD LUCK, CHUCK … I MEAN, OSCAR …
I was wondering why he never corrected Diggs the last time. Kiwi, dammit. Things heating up between these two. Solid writing. Good stuff.
GAGE BLACKWOOD vs. GUNTHER ADLER
Good short TV entrance. No Quimbey as dictated in the match writing guide. Pretty good on length but this definitely doesn’t read like a “summary” match. Rather a short move for move match. That being said solid match and I like how this is being built. Very interested to see how Gage moves forward. A cut to elsewhere or being the segment following is Gage as well it’d be nice to see a cut to backstage or something of the sort. Just for show continuity.
NOT SO CHANCE ENCOUNTER
Hightower and Sawyer are interesting. Especially Sawyer’s hyper sensitive and overblown SBW (Social Bully Warrior) deal. Good segment and it sets up a match. Good stuff.
EXHAUSTING, I SAY
Tricklebish! Fantastic dialogue here. Probably the first pairing of DEFIANCE’s two most quirky characters. This segment was super over for me in entertainment value. Good work, fellas.
Pete and I helped with this one. But Evan and Justin did the heavy lifting if I remember.
OSCAR BURNS vs. DANNY DIGGS
Quimbey isn’t necessary for DEFtv summary style but I see why he was used to set up the Diggs thing… but I think it could have still played without. Card length is exploding in DEF right now and I think sticking the summary style is more important than ever to keep anyone or everyone from getting fatigued. Anyway, Diggs with the last second swerve and a BRAZEN cat fills his roll. “You dumb Kiwi bastard!” He got the nationality right that time didn’t he? Solid match. Diggs does his heel thing after. Fisherman’s DDT on the chair, which I had to look up. I assumed what it was but wasn’t sure. Very similar if not the same as Fisherman Brainbuster, which Douglas uses. Anyway, solid match the Diggs/Bruns saga rolls on. I like the way this has been set up and laid out. Can’t wait to read more.
RIDE ‘EM COWBOY
Christie Zane has been quite the spitfire the past show or two. Very quick segment. Maybe next week we’ll see his Horse with no name. (America Reference. Hate that song.) Odd segment overall, that I for some reason read his voice like Will Ferrell doing a over the top Western voice. Interesting nonetheless.
SECOND LINE, SNIFF, NO! NOT THAT KIND
The BruhhBus! Entertaining segment. A clunky line of dialogue or two (What a great idea this was) and something Petey said… but even that was pretty funny. Nasty Load, Mr. Nasty … there are some gems in here. I think the crudeness of Nasty is what makes others feel he may not be a superface… but I think he is just a loveable “street tuff.”
KYO ISHIDA vs. THEO BAYLOR
NJNP officially picks up a new running mate and murders a immigrant. Quick match or lack thereof, but definitely shows Brother Owen’s and camp mean business. Felt like ECW’s NBKs meets NofD. They really need BAF to start a rap group and lead them out! Music was off center.
PERSONA NON GRATA
Interview stage getting quite the stress test past few cards. I didn’t catch this before but Charlie Ace is super Trumpish. That's good schtick. Angus’ reaction was great. Slow build for this Turner fellow but I dig it. Music cue wasn’t technically formatted right, I don’t know the rule on that in segments though, but I assume it would follow the music note - info - music note deal. Good stuff though.
BRUHH NASTY & JTD vs. BAF
It’s Darren, not Dan. And no need for ring announcements on TV (accordings to the summary doc.) Also I already told Jerald this before posting incase he may have missed it. But everyone should go check that out. Beyond that more fun Bruhh stuff, #WitnesstheThickness. Angus has made quite the turnaround on BAF but they are his BRAZEN kids after all and the incident was over a year ago. “I’m legally blind, Keebs.” Solid match. Much like others on the way here I don’t think this is exactly summery style but it isn’t crazy long. Nasty overcomes the cheating BAF, interested to see where he and Tye Dye go next.
YOU SHOULD HAVE SEEN THIS COMING
Wrote this with Justin, Pete and Evan. Hope you dig it.
KENDRIX IS A WAZZOCK
“Como estas, Bellends?!” Kendrix is incredibly cutting. Really dig the “on the breadline” line. Super solid segment. I like the fresh location. I was looking at that map again recently thinking about using the gym in something. Good build.
DEF TAG TITLE
Quimbey. Will Ferrell! TBH, I have a hard time following what is going on in the tag title scene, on a micro level. Macro, obvs … I can understand the finish and who has the titles an etc. I guess adding to that this card was the old/new faces. Also the swerve at the beginning clearly was meant to be played as funny but it more like a dickish heel move. I don’t know though because most of that beginning had me lost. Same summary issues as mentioned in other matches but all in all not that crazy long but long ... Solid action and a decent match. Hoping I catch on as we move along.
AFRAID OF THE DARK
Paul banged this one out. I think I added three words tops … hope you dig it. Lovely.
What no FLOWER? Quick seg, some dissension in the Bastards camp. With half of the tag titles playing the catalyst. Nice.
Helped. Not to come off like a complete hypocrite for the previous comments; this wasn’t in the summary form either and featured Quimbey announcements.
As noted, a lot, I’m a big mark for JFK. This one didn’t catch me as much. Maybe the length of the card simply fatigued me. That is not to say at all it is bad, this one in particular just didn’t enthrall quite as much as the others have. But that being said it is serve its purpose and get Hendrix's point of view across. Dante’s arrival didn’t really pick things up for me either. It was very info/exposition heavy. Again, served it’s purpose and now JFK knows Dante has it out for him as well.
MIKEY count, 2? (I’m counting that sign from the rundown) So for every ounce of my “huh” for the match stuff, the two following segs DEP and this one … equally click. Nice and easy. I especially like PCP’s self awareness in reference to their former SEG situation. Probably the most FACE like thing they’ve done since the turn. Less, even, in a wrestling since but in a human being/character type of way. Good stuff.
Was this the continuity gaff Jason mentioned in chat? Seems like it but maybe I’m drunk. I’ll assume it is that jawn and not harp on that, bul. Outside of world building I don’t see what else this segment was for. But possibly … time will tell.
Opening commentary hard nice continuity with the entire night. Again to my potential hypocrite-ness, Quimbey is used but I’ve been told the ME gets the pass, so I wouldn’t even mention it … other than to not look like as much of a douche. “Flippydoo fuckery” JFK rearing his well manscaped face with the furniture. “IS IT MY TURN YET, BRUV?” That is pretty great. Albiet short, in the moment blurbs … this is the Kendrix dialogue I pop for. Bruvs, innits, yeahs. I’m all in for the tride and true catchph … words? Great ending, Mushi looks like a beast. JFK isn’t fucking around. Cayle still has the belt … and copyright. Bong. Bong. This show was LONG!
Great stuff guys. Take everything I say with a grain of salt and with the fact in mind that: I’m normally drunk and not that bright. If you read this … feed the backs! It’s not that tough. Read, say some shit, write or wrong … read more say some more wrong shit, read some more … maybe get something right and then post that shit with reckless abandon!!