Re: DEFCON ARC DISCUSSION THREAD -- UNCUT #7 IS ON THE AIR!!
RUNDOWN
Me.
RAIN CITY RONIN VS. THE HOLMSTROM BROTHERS
Again, top five biggest thumbs up situations with me is if you not only utilize an “active NPC” but really roll with their gimmick. Fantastic action, only nit pick I’d say is watch the formatting. The end is a little muddy. Even recap format, near the end, 1… 2… 3… ‘s and DING DING DING’s and the like help sort of block off matches and segments as much as the headers do.
FAT GUY, LITTLE COAT
And right off the bad, a pet peeve I’m seeing more and more. And I’m as guilty as anybody, just using Andy as the sacrificial lamb.
Backstage.
Any locker-room: the specifics don’t really matter.
It should matter. We’ve stopped establishing setting and just throw around “backstage” and “locker room” as a blanket cover-all-the-bases terms. Not saying EVERY vignette needs to be set up with paragraphs of descriptions but a a little legitimate scene setting NEVER hurts a seg. Interview segments can affort super scaled back “backstage / DEF banner” sort of set up… if it’s more than that? Take a minute to tell us where in the building you really are. More fantastic interplay between “Bobby Dane” (aka my favorite unit since ever) and the increasingly killer babyface Cayle Murray. Chris Farley references, always a win in my book.
FUCK SEAN JACKSON
Hey, look at that, just like I was saying lol. Not a lot to say but yyyyyyyyeah buddy. More old school talking to the camera sort of promos, especially on DEFtv, would be fantastic in my book. Also loved this because you kept Zane involved, she gets pushed aside sometimes during these segments. Good job dude.
HARMONY VS. REINHARDT HOFFMAN
Good match, like I’ve been saying the neat sort of understated feud between Harmony and Frank is really unique and has been handled well so far. I’d say kick it into overdrive now, have Harm really really show how pissed she is. I’m hoping for a really fire promo from her, also would love some words from Frank sort of defending his actions showing his
somewhat misguided point of view. Good stuff.
JACK HUNTER DOES A BACKFLIP
Y’all crazy.
O BROTHER, WHERE ART THOU?
Fun story… in the last UNCUT history segment I mentioned a Dewey father, he’s apparently dead (as is mentioned in this segment) a result of a little miscommunication between D and I, so A. I retconned the UNCUT segment to read STEP-dad, and B. in this segment I popped in a “mom and Bill”... so officially, Mrs. Dewey found herself a nice neighborman to bone after Euge and Wayne’s pop died. And THAT folks is how to keep clean continuity!
Anyway, lol, this one was all Damien. God I missed Wayne and Dewey interacting, the pure unfiltered nerd talk / discussion. Wayne really was Eugene’s babyface compus. You immediately see that when they’re face to face. This is why Damien is so goddamn good, y’all.
CAYLE MURRAY VS. MUSHIGIHARA
BEST match if the night so far. Top shelf character development. Cayle falling to numbers / shenanigans, Dane smug as fuck. <3 everything about this puppy. This is the blueprint for how to A. utilize a nitch/weird character like Bobby in a legitimate/non-comedy based storyline B. and how to get some fresh to the fed babyfaces OVER LIKE A MOTHERfucker in one single arc.
ARMCHAIR QUARTERBACK
Loved that this was just Dante. Effective, perfect length.
UNDEFEATED!!!
A smidge long, perhaps. But as always, the legit funny is there. The razor's edge you guys walk between “too wacky” and complete dickbag-r-y is so pitch perfect. There’s so many ways these segments could either be too much or too over the top but the characters have such a clear voice it always works. I WOULD love (eventually) to see these two put in a situation that sort of sucks the “funny” out of the room though. When The Bruvs “get their comeuppance”, it’ll be one of those “moments” we copy and paste over and over and point to as some of our best work, mark my words.
THINGS ARE LOOKING SHAKY
Ask and ye’ shall receive, hot dog.
Harmony:
I really don’t want to hear it, Frank. Regardless of your personal opinions on women in wrestling, I am not some god damned princess in the ivory tower who needs protecting from the evils of the world while I braid my hair and talk to the fluffy little forest animals.
The volume of Harmony’s voice slowly rises and she takes a step towards Frank.
Harmony:
I can handle my own shit.
This. Perfectly delivered line. Perfectly encapsulated the whole arc. The set-up with Penn was goddamn great too with Curtis doing a majority of the talking and Frank… well, Frank just yelling. Inadvertently what’s sort of been planned around Frank and the DOC due to all the rebooking has ended up fantastic setup for post-DEFCON Onslaught related booking. Good stuff guys.
EUGENE DEWEY VS. SEAN JACKSON
Dames / edits from me.
THE LOOPHOLE
Me.
THERE BE MONSTER TRUCKS, ARRRRR!
Y’all crazy as hell, shit. (y’all know how good these are, jerks)
IMPULSE VS. CURTIS PENN
Fantastic build, classic heel shenanigans, incredible use of announcers and even the referee. SOME of the dialogue, especially announcer chatter, could have been bound together in more blocks of “action text” (not saying go full recap, but breaking up the talking with some well thought out “chains” of wrestling match is good on the eyes, imo) but other than that one quibble this was fantastic build.
MR. JACKSON
MUCH LOVE TO MIKE BELL Y’ALL! If you haven’t read his open letter to DEF, Mike just turned 50 and has decided to call it a “career” in ewrestling. I just want to put out there, Mike was one of a handful of people back when I started in NeWA back in the day that was ALWAYS kind and helpful to me, even when I was just awful at this game. He was always willing to give advice and tips or a supportive word. Our little “corner” of this hobby was better for you having been a part of it. Honestly. Stick around and read shows and give feedback, you’ll ALWAYS have access to every board here as far as I’m concerned, you’re a DEF lifer, retired or no. Enjoy your fam, old man! (fantastic segment, too, btw)
THE DAN RYAN COMEDY HOUR
Worked on this w/ mom and dad.
MIKEY UNLIKELY (C) VS. JASON NATAS
Now THAT was a main event. Well formatted near falls and crowd noise, perfect balance of descriptive text and announcer patter. Nothing else need be said. Match of the night, segment of the night, hands down.
Killer show folks. I noticed some grammar and editing mistakes in MY shit, so shame on me. lol